Class Discussion,
Room #3
Date 2/17/98
Start log: Tuesday, February 17, 1998
3:22:15 pm Virtual Park Hall time --
JoeSa has arrived.
AndrewGo has arrived.
JasonOg has arrived.
MaggieCa has arrived.
AndrewGo says, "I'll be right back"
NickSm has arrived.
JoeSa says, "Well, yall might as well skip over mine..."
JasonOg says, "Mine isn't even on the WB yet"
NickSm says, "mine sucks the big one. i got stuck on every
part of the paper."
MaggieCa says, "I have to warn y'all, mine is not really
ready, but I'm always up for suggestions"
JoeSa says, "Did anyone really post a complete rough draft?"
JasonOg says, "I just can't consentrate on my paper, I've got
an Anthropology test covering 14 chapters Friday"
AndrewGo says, "Me"
JasonOg says, "Andy is the good student"
MaggieCa says, "should we go to the WB?I posted 3 para."
AndrewGo says, "Yeah, this my second time taking this class"
JoeSa says, "Oh"
JoeSa says, "yeah, Maggie...."
MaggieCa says, "shall we"
JasonOg says, "I've got half of my paper done, but its not on
the WB"
JoeSa says, "who's should we start with?"
JoeSa says, "Andy's?"
JasonOg says, "I guess Andys"
MaggieCa says, "sure"
MaggieCa goes out.
AndrewGo says, "What are we talking about?"
JoeSa says, "OK Andy get ready for the onslaught of opinions
about your paper"
AndrewGo says, "That is cool"
AndrewGo says, "Give me your best shot(s)."
JoeSa says, "We are going to critisize the only complete rough
draft posted:yours"
JoeSa goes out
AndrewGo says, "Great, I haven't pissed off anybody today, have I?"
AndrewGo says, "Can I tell y'all one thing?"
AndrewGo says, "I know my title sucks, I have to think of a new one"
AndrewGo says, "It was the only thing I could think of at 3:00
in the morning"
JoeSa says, "Andy, what is that stuff under the title?"
AndrewGo says, "A quote"
JoeSa says, "Using it?"
AndrewGo says, "Yep"
JoeSa says, "Is it placed right?"
JoeSa says, "correctly I mean"
AndrewGo says, "It tells about my stance on technology
throughout my paper"
JoeSa says, "OK, but R U allowd to just stick it at the beginning?"
MaggieCa has arrived.
AndrewGo says, "I asked Mr. C about it, and he said it was ok"
JoeSa says, "That's cool"
AndrewGo says, "I guess it is sort of foreshadowing"
MaggieCa says, "what have I missed"
AndrewGo says, "Nothing"
AndrewGo says, "YET!"
MaggieCa says, "sounds good Andy"
MaggieCa says, "Really"
MaggieCa says, "?"
AndrewGo says, "Thanks"
JoeSa says, "Andy, do you have the paper in frontof you ?"
MaggieCa says, "no problem"
AndrewGo says, "NO"
AndrewGo says, "sorry"
AndrewGo says, "But I can remember some of it"
JoeSa says, "That's OK, but make a note...."
JoeSa says, "It might just be me but I dont think your second
sentence flows(makes complete sense)"
AndrewGo says, "Which paragraph"
JoeSa says, "First"
AndrewGo says, "How does it start"
JasonOg says, "Andy, just make sure not to combine two words"
JoeSa says, "It is even more a dream..."
AndrewGo says, "Okay "
AndrewGo says, "Hold on"
JoeSa says, "OK"
JasonOg says, "I don't think there are any big problems in the
paper , just do your revising to pick up the little things"
MaggieCa says, "good advice"
AndrewGo says, "Alright I'm back"
AndrewGo says, "joe, do you think I say generation to much?"
AndrewGo says, "In my first paragraph"
JoeSa says, "hold on a sec"
MaggieCa has disconnected.
AndrewGo says, "For example, second sentence"
AndrewGo says, "I say it 5 times in the first 5 sentences"
JoeSa says, "I dont really think you use it too much..."
MaggieCa has connected.
AndrewGo says, "I need to use another word, a synonon"
AndrewGo says, "I don't know how to spell that word"
JoeSa says, "however, since you are using "we" and "us" in the
second sentence you might want to use it in the first one as well"
JoeSa says, "its synonym"
AndrewGo says, "You are right, the second sentence is confusing"
AndrewGo says, "I talk about A generation then say it is MY
generation"
JoeSa says, "Yeah"
AndrewGo says, "Okay, so I guess if I identify my generation
at the beginning it wouldn't be so confusing?"
JoeSa says, "Right, I think"
AndrewGo says, "Yeah, thats what I'm saying"
AndrewGo says, "Well, if there isn't anything else...."
JoeSa says, "Ok, also, dont forget to underline or put
quotations around your titles..."
AndrewGo says, "Oh yeah, forgot they don't show up on the WB"
MaggieCa says, ""y'all want to do mine now?"
MaggieCa says, "please"
JoeSa says, "Ok"
AndrewGo says, "Fine with me"
JoeSa says, "In the second sentence you say certain "aspects".
You might want to specify those"
JoeSa says, "woops I meant third"
MaggieCa says, "okay"
AndrewGo says, "Yeah, and watch your pronouns in the first
paragraph"
AndrewGo says, "Mr. C doesn't like to see a lot of them"
MaggieCa says, "i can do that"
JasonOg says, "Maggie, you might want to make the last
sentences in you r paragraghs more transitional"
MaggieCa says, "okay"
JoeSa says, "I take it that your audience is students, Maggie?"
MaggieCa says, "yes of our generation"
JoeSa says, "Ok"
MaggieCa says, "redundant"
MaggieCa says, "/"
MaggieCa says, "?"
AndrewGo says, "No"
AndrewGo says, "You need to state your audience a little
clearer in your intro"
MaggieCa says, "how?"
JasonOg says, "good question"
AndrewGo says, "Your last paragraph does it very well, but it
is the last paragraph"
JasonOg says, "I was wondering how to do thata"
JasonOg says, "that"
MaggieCa says, "i figured that because I used Our generation
so much that it would be stated sort of clearly"
MaggieCa says, "Help"
JasonOg says, "If I wanted an essay to appeal to our
generation I just have to write about beer and sex"
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] Mr.Cole says, "OK, folks, we are out of
time. "
AndrewGo says, "Hold on, you can't rush perfection"
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] KurtDa has arrived.
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] WendyFr has arrived.
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] KurtDa has disconnected.
MaggieCa says, "sorry!"
NickSm has disconnected.
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] Mr.Cole says, "Those of you who didn't
have drafts up today, get them up. The rest of you do some reading."
JoeSa says, "In your third par, you need to be careful about
your tense"
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] AnandVy has arrived.
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] JulieOw has arrived.
JasonOg goes out.
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] JasonOg has arrived.
[Mr.Cole's Classroom] JasonOg goes out.
AndrewGo says, "Just give examples like you did in the last
paragraph, it is better to be redundant then unclear"
MaggieCa thanks her group members
AndrewGo says, "Good luck, Maggie. See y'all later"
MaggieCa says, "goodbye"
MaggieCa goes out.
AndrewGo has disconnected.
JoeSa leueu
End log: Tuesday, February 17, 1998 4:16:14 pm Virtual Park Hall time --